Hi Will, I am Zoe from Awahono School. I like your slideshow because you have a really cool background. Did you know that you have the same slideshow underneath this one. You could also make sure that your slideshow isn't off the page for next time.
Hi Will, Haylee here from Awahono school. I like your background because it was really creative. Did you know that your slideshow is coming off the side? So maybe you could fix that. I also really like all of your poems. Maybe next you can come and see my blog.
Hi Will,I'm Solly from Awahono School. I like how you described the polar bear, especially the part where you said " fishy smell." it's just amazing! Is it hard to think of different ways to describe animals without giving it away? Maybe next time you could tell the reader what animal you are describing at the end. Great job keep up the amazing work!
Hi Will,I'm Lily from Awahono school,I Like the way you described the animals. Did You know you have the same poem above this one.I also noticed that your poems was off the page so maybe you could fix that.I am looking forward to what you do next.
Hi will, I'm Troy from ahipara school, I like how you described all the different animals. My favorite was the polar bear. Maybe next time keep your writing on the paper because some of it was not. Keep up the good work!
Hi Will, I am Zoe from Awahono School. I like your slideshow because you have a really cool background. Did you know that you have the same slideshow underneath this one. You could also make sure that your slideshow isn't off the page for next time.
ReplyDeleteOk it was a mistake. And anyway thanks for this comment
Deletehello will, my name is Ngairon and I go to Ahipara school, your slideshow was very fun and cool to me.
ReplyDeleteThanks for the positive comment, Ngarion.
DeleteHi Will, Haylee here from Awahono school. I like your background because it was really creative. Did you know that your slideshow is coming off the side? So maybe you could fix that. I also really like all of your poems. Maybe next you can come and see my blog.
ReplyDeleteHi, Haylee I will make sure I fix the slide because I noticed that too. Thanks Will
DeleteHi Will,I'm Solly from Awahono School. I like how you described the polar bear, especially the part where you said " fishy smell." it's just amazing! Is it hard to think of different ways to describe animals without giving it away? Maybe next time you could tell the reader what animal you are describing at the end. Great job keep up the amazing work!
ReplyDeleteOk for when i do more poetry and update this slide i'll do an answers slide at the end. Thanks Will.
DeleteHi Will,I'm Lily from Awahono school,I Like the way you described the animals. Did You know you have the same poem above this one.I also noticed that your poems was off the page so maybe you could fix that.I am looking forward to what you do next.
ReplyDeleteOk i couldn't fix that they were off the page. I must of accidentally made it too big. Thanks Will.
DeleteHi will, I'm Troy from ahipara school, I like how you described all the different animals. My favorite was the polar bear.
ReplyDeleteMaybe next time keep your writing on the paper because some of it was not.
Keep up the good work!
Ok sure thanks for the tips. Have a good day and good work with all your stuff. Thanks Will.
DeleteThis is very cool. Next time try more introduction. I love poetry.
ReplyDeleteThanks, I'll do more introduction
ReplyDeleteawesome poetry
ReplyDeletethanks.
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